托福写作之浅谈综合写作
根据托福OG有关综合写作的要求,评分标准主要为信息(information)和逻辑(organization)。这两点考察的就是我们对听力要点的把握能力,以及如何用简要的语言概括阅读稿和听力稿中的信息,并且层次清晰,要点明确。有的同学说,我听懂了,我直接写就好;有的说,我看懂了,但听懂了一部分,编下就行。其实不然。阅读稿看懂了,听力听懂了,只是一半。还需要将听力中的有效信息用自己的语言表达出来,并且也不能与阅读稿中的表达完全一致。
在这里我将综合听力需要锻炼的能力列为以下三点:
1. 阅读能力(快、准)
2. 听写和速记能力(不是简单词不记,是记重点名词、动词或短语)
3. 一定的改写能力(这个就是我们对于句型的运用,涉及句子表达准确性、语态、词的适当替换等)。
可能有的同学说听不懂,这里建议,如果练习听力,尽量用托福听力材料进行练习,因为托福听力材料内容信息量大,需要记的东西多,也能通过做题找到自己听力的盲区。如果托福听力能听懂了,托福综合写作的听力也没有问题了。
这里附上两篇学生写的综合写作范文。
TPO26
Inthe listening material, the professor made several points about the invasion ofthe zebra mussels can be stopped.
Firstof all, the reading passage states that the human transportation will cause theinvasion of the zabra mussels, while the professor contradicts that people cannotcontrol it in the past because of the lack of the knowledge. On the other hand,the ocean water will be taken by the ship to replace the freshwater, which maykill the mussels.
Moreover,the reading passage also mentions that if the mussels are taken to the newplace, they won't have predators, while the professor refutes that they candominate it just for a short time. They will be a new food source for birds, sothey can not dominant in the end.
Furthermore,the reading passage then talks that the invasion of the mussels will cause thedecline in the fish population in its area, while the professor departs from itthat it is true that mussels have negative impact in plankton. But for otherfish, mussels provide nutrition for fish at the bottom of the lake.
Thisis the entirely opposed to the writer's expectation.
TPO27
Inthis listening material, the professor states several points about global cooling caused by the Little Ice Age.
First,the reading material states that after the ocean currents melted, the glaciersproduce an enormous number of cold freshwater into the Gulf Stream. This actioninfluenced the earth’s climate strongly, while the professor in the listening material disagrees that the cooling water just affected Europe and parts ofNorth America, but it can’t explain global cooling, or the cooling in southernarea.
Second,the reading material says that the volcanic eruption caused the Little Ice Ageas they generate dark clouds with dust and sulfur gas into our atmosphere whichwill reduce the earth’s temperature. By contrast, the professor contradictsthat the volcanic eruption produce colorful clouds and gases, but those gasesare not strong enough to decrease the earth’s temperature.
Lastly,the reading material mentions that the decrease of human population affect theearth’s temperature indirectly because we no longer cut substantial number oftrees and let the forest grow freely, these trees absorb carbon dioxide andthat will reduce the earth’s temperature. However, the professor objects thatpeople still cut a large number of trees and the short cease of deforestationis not long enough to cause the global cooling.
(编辑:马菲)