托福写作常见的错误分析
学生在独立写作常见的错误离不开评分的三个维度分析：语言、内容、组织结构，接下来我将根据这几大块内容分别进行详细分析：大家可以借鉴一下哦!
来源：合肥新东方 刘静静
Part1
语言篇
托福毕竟是语言测试，独立写作对语言的要求有2个：准确性、丰富性。
a. 准确性：
缺乏准确性是指存在语言错误，并且已经影响了文章内容表达和读者理解。 OG原句，However, if you make a lot of grammar errors and if those errors make it hard to understand your meaning, you will get a lower score.
准确性又分为语法错误和中式英文。
我们先来看语法错误：
例子1，比如，针对题目是否同意your jobs have greater influence on your happiness that your social life does.
学生在其中一个中间段写到了下面2句话：
What’s more, job things can show your ability and characteristic. Doing your work can let u show what u learned and understood and show what you are good at makes u feel your value.
读者读到这里肯定会confused, 因为语言的原因，比如用词错误，比如两个句子黏在一起，不能清楚理解作者要表达的意思。
当时当面询问这位同学，回答是，工作可以体现一个人的能力和性格，可以反映出你学到的东西，可以展示自己的所长，同时也还可以让自己更自信。
那么我们可以用很简单的方式表达这个意思：
Work can reflect a person's ability and character, represent what one have learned, show one’s talent, and at the same time, make one become more confident.
例子2，同样针对题目， in twenty years, students will no longer use printed books, 下面这句话表达的意思对一个native speaker来说也很难清晰理解。
Furthermore, printed books is better to protect our eyes. We use of the book are made of woods. It is the most natural.
可以改为 Furthermore, printed books can protect our eyes because they are made of woods.
这种最基本的错误就明显的定义了学生的语言水平，所以想要根本改善这类错误，就要从基础抓起，打牢语言底子。
所谓中式英文, 是指中国学生自己造的“短语或句子”， 类似good good study, day day up,那一类的。究其原因，主要是阅读量太少，输入太少，只能自己造。
例子1，比如针对题目，nowadays people are less friendlier than they were in the past, 一学生在举例的时候写出了下面的话，
I told him I had forgotten at home, actually, the notebook was in my bag.
大家猜一猜他想表达什么意思，他要说的竟然是他把笔记本忘在家里了，可是这个忘怎么能用forget, 大家应该都知道是leave，这种错误让ETS考官情可以堪。
例子2，还有针对题目， it is impossible to be completely honest with friends.
学生写出了下面的句子，for example, my friends cut an ugly hair style, but we can not say “your hair is really ugly, it looks like a shit.” 这样的句子是要闹哪样，完全让人苦笑不得，剪头发是说 have one’s hair cut好嘛。
语言是讲究搭配的，简单常见的词只要搭配合适，放置合适的语境，就是我们追求的，否则还是那句话，证据多么充分，结构多么合理，如果语言错误百出依然是a lower score, no more than 20;
b.丰富性
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