新闻资讯-2022年雅思写作外教范文#65：富裕国家额外的经济增长能让国民更幸福吗（21.9真题，含音频）

你好呀，我是来自加拿大的雅思外教Mac。今天，给大家带来一个雅思大作文真题（2021年9月18日雅思写作真题）的原创范文。    

老规矩，以下是正文目录：     

1，题目

2，审题

3，高分范文

4，范文朗读

5，范文地道词汇中英对照，包括：

• 题目改述
• 观点类大作文高分句型
• 展示“词汇丰富度”的词汇&短语
• 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇&句型 

6，雅思写作大礼包(7.0版，大作文76页，小作文57页)

• 高分范文，部分范文有音频二维码

• 必备句型 、写作技巧

• 考前急救包

• 雅思机考记

上题：

Some experts suppose that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

审题：

• Type: Opinion 观点类大作文 (我的观点：for the most part, agree)

• Body 1: financial wealth allows for freedom of choice

• Body 2: excessive choices and convenience lead to obesity, and narcissism, etc.

- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗读 -

It has often been cited by academics that when a certain threshold of wealth is met within a nation, further growth in national prosperity does not increase the general level of contentment within the population. For the most part, I agree with this assumption for the following reasons. 

One of the main reasons some think increased wealth equates to increased happiness is that higher rates of monetary gain can bring about a greater range of choices. While this might be true at an individual level, it does not always stand at the macro level, as some of the wealthiest nations seem also to have some of the highest rates of conditions normally associated with unhappiness. These ‘conditions’ include depression, suicide, obesity, narcissism, and an increase in a general malaise of the people, and are evident in great numbers in wealthy countries such as the United States, Japan, and Canada, countries where the GDP has remained high for decades. 

Despite this upward trend of despondency within many in the population in such countries, there is no doubt that a rise in a person’s financial affluence can have a positive impact on their life. Increased wealth brings about a greater plethora of not just choices, but also conveniences, affecting aspects such as living environment, consumer choices, and sources of pleasure. Nevertheless, evidence seems to support the notion that despite increased national wealth, even when this economic uptick reaches the populace directly, many people still slip into a malaise brought on by the lack of purpose and materialism on the one hand, and an overabundance of convenience on the other. 

In conclusion, I believe that although many people are able to use an increase in personal financial wealth to increase their life contentment, the same cannot be said, generally, for the population of a rich country with increasing prosperity, since many citizens will remain void of a central guiding philosophy, for which is exacerbated by the array of choices and conveniences open to them, and hence, become victims of dissatisfaction.  

- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改述:

• Some experts = academics 

• suppose = It has often been cited by

• a country is already rich = a certain threshold of wealth is met within a nation

• additional increases = further growth

• economic wealth = national prosperity

• make its citizens happier = increase the general level of contentment

   

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 观点类大作文高分句型：

• It has often been cited that…
• For the most part, I agree with this (assumption) for the following reasons.

Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语:

• , that when

• is met within

• this

   

Vocabulary 高分地道词汇和短语：

• a certain threshold of ……的一个临界点

• prosperity 繁荣昌盛

• contentment 满足

• assumption 假想；设想；假设

Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到：

• additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier (agree)

   

Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：

• One of the main reasons…is that

• equates to 等于

• higher rates of 高利率

• monetary gain 金钱收益

• a greater range of 更广的

• at an individual level 个人层次

• does not always stand at 不总是停留在

• macro (level) 宏观(层面)

• some of the….(also to have) some of the 

• normally associated with 通常与……相关

• depression 沮丧；抑郁；消沉

• suicide 自杀

• obesity 肥胖

• narcissism 自恋

• general malaise 周身不适

• evident 明显的

• decades 数载

• is that
• bring about
• While this
• , it
• , as some of 
• Also
• These
• , and
• such as
• , countries where

• The part I disagree with (from a ‘personal increase in wealth’ point of view) but must remain focused on a country (nation, society, overall economy). This shows a ‘dichotomy’ or ‘contrast’.

• Despite this…

• there is no doubt that 

• upward trend of 上升趋势
• despondency 丧气；失望

• affluence 富裕

• a greater plethora of 更多的

• living environment 生活环境

• consumer choices 消费选择

• sources of pleasure 快乐源泉

• evidence seems to support 普遍认为

• the notion that ……的观念

• uptick 上升；上涨

• the populace 大众；平民

• slip into 进入；陷入

• the lack of (purpose) 缺乏目标

• materialism 物质主义

• an overabundance of 过量的；过多的；过于丰富的

• Despite this…

• Such

• there

• not just …, but also

• , affecting

• such as

• Nevertheless

• that despite

• , even when this

• still

• brought on by

• on the one hand, … on the other

• In conclusion, I believe that

• personal financial wealth 个人经济财富

• life contentment 生活的满足感

• (the same) cannot be said (for) 

• void of 缺乏

• a central guiding principle 某种导向；某种指导原则

• exacerbated by 加剧；恶化

• the array of 各种各样的

• victims of ……的受害者

• dissatisfaction 不满足

• although

• , the same (cannot be said for)

• , generally,

• , for which

• , and hence,

• become