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今天，给大家带来一个IELTS雅思大作文真题(2021.11.6真题)的原创范文。    

老规矩，以下是正文目录：     

1，题目

2，审题

3，高分范文

4，范文朗读

5，范文地道词汇中英对照，包括：

• 题目改述
• 讨论+观点类大作文高分句型
• 展示“词汇丰富度”的词汇&短语
• 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇&句型 

雅思大作文题目：

Many people use social media every day to get in touch with others and news events. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? 

审题：

• Type:  (Discuss) & Opinion (讨论) + 观点类大作文 (advantages outweigh disadvantages)

• Body 1: disadvantages such as being distracted, rumors, and false narratives

• Body 2: advantages definitely outweigh—greater contact with friends and family, instantaneous news, many from first-hand accounts

• Key word:  ‘outweigh’ / far greater than 

- Model Answer 高分范文  -

A vast cross-section of society utilizes social media daily to communicate with acquaintances and close contacts and to keep abreast of current events. This essay shall explore the merits and drawbacks of this phenomenon; however, in my opinion, I believe its benefits are far greater than the negatives. 

One of the most serious disadvantages of social media is that it causes many people to become distracted from that for which they should be applying themselves. Social media encompasses a wide range of smartphone applications, websites, and media channels, and also covers a broad spectrum of functions, everything from chat programs to news podcasts to video channels such as ‘TikTok’. These multi-faceted programs and apps, and their simple convenience, causes many people a type of anxiety derived from a perception that they are ‘missing out’ on the latest news, or have been relegated to being unimportant by friends. Coupled with the addictive qualities of video, texting, and audio, many people are simply unable to disconnect, and thus, concentration has become difficult.  

On the other hand, social media has revolutionized the way people stay in touch with each other and has fundamentally reshaped the landscape of news dissemination. Chat applications, for example, allow us to remain involved in people’s lives even if we do not actually have direct communication with the other, since people are able to post personalized items about themselves in so-called ‘friend circles’. Along with the convenience of chatting, either by voice or written messages, people can feel more included in the day-to-day events of others. Likewise, social media channels, where live events, the expression of different opinions, and the sheer internationalization of online material can be broadcast, means people can be kept updated in real time about the real world.  

In conclusion, though social media platforms and applications can cause people to become addicted and distracted, the availability of being interconnected with our world and the opportunity for greater communication with others makes it clear, in my opinion, that the advantages of this recent occurrence in society are far greater than the negatives. 

- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -

- (1) Introduction 

Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改写：

• Many people = A vast cross-section of society

• use = utilizes

• every day = daily

• to get in touch with = to communicate with

• others = acquaintances and close contacts

• news events = current events

Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 观点类大作文通用句型：

• In my opinion, I believe the benefits of this phenomenon are far greater than the negatives. 

Words showing Cohesion (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

• to

• with

• this

• far greater than

Vocabulary 高分地道词汇和短语：

• vast cross-section of society 大部分人

• utilizes 使用

• acquaintances 熟人

• keep abreast of 了解最新情况

• current events 时事

- (2) Body 1 -
Aspects that must be referred to: disadvantages of social media 社交媒体的劣势Standard IELTS essay phrase 通用句型：

• One of the most serious disadvantages of…is that…

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：

• to become distracted 分心

• applying themselves 专心于；集中注意力到

• encompasses 包含

• a wide range of 大范围的；大量的

• a broad spectrum of 广泛的

• multi-faceted 多方面的

• anxiety 焦虑

• derived from 来源于；源自

• a perception 感知；看发

• ‘missing out’ on 错过

• relegated to 沦落为

• addictive qualities 让人沉迷；上瘾；让人产生依赖性

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

• is that

• from that for which they

• themselves

• , and also

• , everything from…to…to

• such as

• These

• , and their

• , causes many

• that they

• Coupled with

• , many

• simply

• , and thus

- (3) Body 2 -

Aspects that must be referred to: advantages of social media 

社交媒体的优势

Standard IELTS essay phrase 通用句型：

• On the other hand, 

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：

• revolutionized the way 革新了……的方式

• fundamentally reshaped the landscape of 从根本上革新了；让……改头换面

• news dissemination 新闻传播；资讯发布

• to post 发布

• personalized 个性化的

• ‘friend circles’ 朋友圈

• the convenience of ……的便利性

• sheer 纯粹的；十足的

• internationalization of 国际化

• kept updated in real time 实时了解

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

• On the other hand,

• , for example,

• allow

• even if

• we

• , since

• so-called

• Along with

• either by…or

• Likewise

• where

• , means

- (4) Conclusion -

Standard IELTS essay phrase 通用句型：

• In conclusion, though…

• ...makes it clear, in my opinion, that

Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：

• the availability of 可用性；可得到的东西

• interconnected with 互联互通

• recent occurrence 近况

Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：

• though

• can cause

• , that

• This

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