8月12日雅思大作文示范写作 | 青少年犯罪是否该与成年人一样处罚_托福写作
2023年8月12日雅思大作文题目
Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (2023/08/12)
范文及解析
Introduction
Juvenile delinquency has gradually become a conundrum that obsesses many countries. In order to make the young aware of repercussions incurred by crimes, some people propose that it behooves both teenagers and adults to receive the same punishments after perpetrating crimes. Despite its justification, my stance is that the penalties for teenagers should be tailored in accordance with actual situations.
解析
单边观点类大作文，关于犯罪处罚的问题，注意讨论主体限定在young people以及commit serious crimes;论证过程需要注意青少年的特征性;
青少年犯罪已逐渐成为许多国家的难题。为了让年轻人意识到犯罪的影响，一些人建议青少年和成年人在犯罪后都应受到同样的惩罚。尽管有正当理由，但我的立场是，对青少年的惩罚应该根据实际情况进行调整。
conundrum n.令人迷惑的难题;
repercussion n.反响，影响;
tailored adj.特制的，专门的;
Body 1
Indeed, stringent laws serve as a deterrent, barring teenagers from committing crimes again. The same severe adult punishments inflicted on the premeditated underage criminals will not only embody the justice of law, but also render juvenile ones to recoil from stern punitive measures, thus smoothing the way for social stability.The mild legal conviction for juvenile offenders, on the contrary, predisposes adolescents to flout laws. The ramification is that these anti-social teenagers, under the shelter of juvenile laws, will unscrupulously violate laws to satiate their abnormal psychological sensation such as campus bullying . Hence, light penalty for felony is ludicrous.
解析
赞成跟成年人一样相同处罚：
(1) 法律应当公平;
(2) 产生一定的震慑作用;
严格的法律是一种威慑，防止青少年再次犯罪。对有预谋的未成年罪犯施加的同等严厉的惩罚不仅将体现法律正义，还将使青少年对严厉的惩罚措施产生畏避心理，从而保障社会稳定。相反，温和定罪使青少年容易藐视法律。其后果是，这些反社会的青少年在青少年法律的庇护下，将肆无忌惮地违反法律，以满足他们不正常的心理，如校园欺凌。因此，重罪轻罚是很不合理的。
stringent adj.严格的;
premeditated adj.预谋的;经预先计划的;
embody v.具体表现，体现;
render v.使成为，使处于某种状态;
recoil vi.畏缩;弹回;
stern adj.严厉的，认真的;
predispose v.使倾向于，使受……的影响;
flout v.藐视，无视(规则、法律等);
ramification n.衍生物;(衍生的)结果、影响
unscrupulously adv.无道德原则地;
satiate vt.充分满足;
felony n.重罪;
Body 2
Nevertheless, the judicial system for young people should be more flexible because the young still in the formative years cannot differentiate right from wrong, and they are occasionally derailed by manifold culprits. Specifically, teenagers' illegal behavior of harming others is highly likely swayed by ferocious plots of TV dramas concerning gangs. The adult criminals’ motives, conversely, are very explicit, such as purposefully bilking netizens out of money in online fraud schemes. In this sense, a stricter penalty for those unintentional lawbreakers is far from sensible. Instead, condign punishments, be they serving the community or sweeping streets, are highly advisable, through which the young will be instilled into a keen sense of abiding by laws and never go astray out of curiosity.
解析
反对跟成年人一样相同处罚：
(1) 青少年不成熟，不能很好地判断对错;
(2) 青少年犯罪主要会受到外在社会环境的影响;应该关注如何帮助他们走上正确的道路;
然而，司法系统应该更加灵活，因为青少年仍处于成长的阶段，心智不够成熟，无法区分对与错，他们偶尔会被多种外在因素影响而走错路。具体来说，青少年伤害他人的非法行为很可能被有关电视剧的暴力情节所左右。相反，成年罪犯的动机非常明确，例如在在线欺诈计划中故意骗取网民的钱。从这个意义上说，对那些无意的违法者进行更严厉的惩罚远非明智。相反，适度的惩罚，无论是为社区服务还是扫街，都是非常可取的，通过这种惩罚，年轻人将会有遵守法律的意识，永远不会因为好奇心而误入歧途。
derail vt.使…越轨;
manifold adj.繁多的，多种多样的;
culprit n.问题的起因;
sway v.摇摆;影响(某人);
ferocious adj.凶猛的，残暴的;
bilk vt.欺骗，诈骗;
unintentional adj.非故意的;无意识的;
condign adj.相当的;应得的(尤指惩罚);
go astray v. 误入歧途;
Ending Paragraph
To recapitulate，taking original motives into account is a prerequisite for the justice of laws. There is no one-fits-all remedial solution for such a convoluted and prickly social woe. It is justified that custom-tailored penalty based on motives may be the optimal tactic for juvenile delinquency.
解析
考虑原始动机是法律公正的先决条件。对于如此棘手的社会问题，没有适合所有人的解决方案。基于动机的定制惩罚可能是青少年犯罪的策略。
recapitulate vi.概括;重述要点;
convoluted adj.复杂的;费解的;
prickly adj.多刺的;棘手的;
woe n.麻烦，问题;
